Please let me know about how's my new work? I need your feedbacks guys! God bless us all!

Umm i just need opinions that's all and pls tell me if it was good or bad

Please check this story out and leave me opinions on how I can improve my writing style. Your feedback will help a lot. Thanks!

kariella cee2 hours ago

I kind of noticed that, too. I noticed that this isn't wordy and that detailed maybe because I focused on the plot too much. Thanks for pointing that out, this will help me a lot.

I personally don't think my story plots are brilliant enough :')
-And~~ I really want to know what readers think of stories I really really enjoy writing.
Thanks~~

Zemuang Muang3 hours ago

I have no leads sigh~~
Care to help me out? :')

I feel like something's missing in this poem and I can't find words to express what I want to express. Care to help me out?

Blue Words3 hours ago

Oh, I kinda felt that too. Thanks for the advice! I'll try to revise it and find the right words. Thanks a lot! :D